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-Naruto- · 7. Dezember 2008

Hallo erstmal,

Ich bitte euch darum diesen englischen Text nach Rechtschreibfehlern, Fehler in der Zeit ( Tense), Kommafehler und Satzstellung (Word order) zu kontollieren. Die Zeit, die wir verwenden müssen ist simple present. Danke im Vorraus.

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In Chapter 5 Ponyboy wakes up in the church and finds a letter from Johnny that says he went to get supplies. Johnny buys a copy of the book “Gone with the wind.” Furthermore, Johnny insists, that they have to cut their hair, because they want to be unrealised. First Ponyboy delays but later he understands, that he must do it and cuts his hair. For the next week, the boys hide out at the church and pass there time with reading “Gone of the Wind”, and playing poker. Later Ponyboy recites a poem titled “Nothing Gold can stay.” After a few days Dally comes to the church and gives Ponyboy a letter from Sodapop. After he reads the letter, Dally goes with Johnny and Ponyboy to a restaurant. There he gives them a very important information. He says that the friends of Bob are angry about Bob’s death. Because of this there is going to be a fight between Socs and Greasers. Furthermore Darry tells Ponyboy and Johnny, that they have a spy. The spy is the redhead Cherry, who Ponyboy and Johnny meet at the cinema.

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Spawn08 · 7. Dezember 2008

AW: Englisch

Zitat von -Naruto-: ↑

Hallo erstmal,

Ich bitte euch darum diesen englischen Text nach Rechtschreibfehlern, Fehler in der Zeit ( Tense), Kommafehler und Satzstellung (Word order) zu kontollieren. Die Zeit, die wir verwenden müssen ist simple present. Danke im Vorraus.

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In Chapter 5 Ponyboy wakes up in the church and finds a letter from Johnny which says he went to get supplies. Johnny buys a copy of the book “Gone with the wind.” Furthermore, Johnny insists, that they have to cut their hair, because they want to be unrealised. First Ponyboy delays but later he understands, that he has to do it and cuts his hair. For the next week, the boys hide out at the church and pass their time with reading “Gone with the Wind”, and playing poker. Later Ponyboy recites a poem titled “Nothing Gold can stay.” After a few days Dally comes to the church and gives Ponyboy a letter from Sodapop. After he reads the letter, Dally goes with Johnny and Ponyboy to a restaurant. There he gives them a very important information. He says that the friends of Bob are angry about Bob’s death. Because of this there is going to be a fight between Socs and Greasers. Furthermore Darry tells Ponyboy and Johnny, that they have a spy. The spy is the redhead Cherry, who Ponyboy and Johnny have met at the cinema.

Klicke in dieses Feld, um es in vollständiger Größe anzuzeigen.

Es sind zwar keine offiziellen fehler, aer dieses ständige wiederholen von "tell" und "say" ist stilistisch nicht sehr anspruchsvoll.. nur so als tip

High Contrast · 7. Dezember 2008

AW: Englisch

Das with würd ich weglassen... Ist stilistisch besser ...

b3sh11 · 7. Dezember 2008

AW: Englisch

würd das noch ändern [...] = kein Kommata

DarkZonk · 8. Dezember 2008

AW: Englisch

Zitat von -Naruto-: ↑

Hallo erstmal,

Ich bitte euch darum diesen englischen Text nach Rechtschreibfehlern, Fehler in der Zeit ( Tense), Kommafehler und Satzstellung (Word order) zu kontollieren. Die Zeit, die wir verwenden müssen ist simple present. Danke im Vorraus.

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In Chapter 5 Ponyboy wakes up in the church and finds a letter from Johnny which says he went away to get supplies. Johnny buys a copy of the book “Gone with the wind.” Furthermore, he insists, that they have to cut their hair, because they need to be unidentifiable. First Ponyboy regrets but later he understands that he must do it and cuts his hair. For the next week, the boys hide out at the church and pass there time with reading “Gone of the Wind”, and playing poker. Later Ponyboy recites a poem titled “Nothing Gold can stay.” After a few days Dally comes to the church and gives Ponyboy a letter from Sodapop. After reading the letter, Dally goes with Johnny and Ponyboy to a restaurant,qhwew he twll them that the friends of Bob are angry about Bob’s death. Due to this there is going to be a fight between Socs and Greasers. In addition to that Darry tells Ponyboy and Johnny, that they have a spy,which is Cherry, the red-haired girl, who Ponyboy and Johnny met at the cinema.

Klicke in dieses Feld, um es in vollständiger Größe anzuzeigen.

so hätte ichs bissel ausgebessert.

ganz wichtig: kein komma vor that!

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