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-Naruto- · 28. Mai 2008

Hallo, ich hab ne frage. Könntet ihr mir bitte diesen englischen Text korrigieren.
Danke im vorraus.

On Wednesday the 21th Mai 2008 the teachers planed a excursion in London. I got up at 6:00 o´clock and made me ready for this day. First I brushed my teeth and after this I took a shower. After me my room partners Mischa and Igor made themselves ready for this day. At 6:40 our host mother Ms.Boakis gave us breakfast. We all eat cereals and after the breakfast we go out wit our bags stuffed with lunchboxes and a camera. Mischa, Igor and I were waiting for about one hout for the coach. Finally the coach was at 08:30 at the bus stop. Our grroup went in the bus and we drove to London. When we were in London, we went in two groups the different sights. One group was with Mr. Niemeitz and one with Mr. Balck. I wad in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupils in the group must make a prasentation with their partners about their sight. The students, that started were Lino and Antonia with their Topic "Houses of Parliament." The speech of Lino and Antonia was very long and so I noticed many informations.

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Geazy · 28. Mai 2008

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On Wednesday the 21th Mai 2008, the teachers had planed an excursion to London.
I got up at 6:00 o´clock and made me ready for this day.
At first, I brushed my teeth and then I took a shower.
My room mates Mischa and Igor got ready for this day, too.
At 6:40 our host mother Ms.Boakis gave us breakfast.
After eating cereals we went outside/abroad with our bags stuffed (filled) with lunchboxes and a camera.
Our group went to London by bus.
Mischa, Igor and me were waiting about one hour for the coach.
Finally, the coach arrived at 08:30 at the bus stop.
When we were in London, we splitted up in two groups and visited some sights.
One group went with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck.
I was in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupils had to make a presentation with their partners about the sightseeing.
The first students who showed their presentation with the topic "Houses of Parliament" were Lino and Antonia. The speech of Lino and Antonia was very long and I have quoted/noted down many information.

So ungefähr, sind vll. noch n paar Fehler drin, hab jetzt nicht die Lust es mir mehrmals durchzulesen, weil der Text crap ist.

schlaues bürschchen, was soll eigentlich "Naruto 4RR ist never got RR " bedeuten?

-Naruto- · 28. Mai 2008

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Zitat von Geazy: ↑

On Wednesday the 21th Mai 2008, the teachers had planed an excursion to London.
I got up at 6:00 o´clock and made me ready for this day.
At first, I brushed my teeth and then I took a shower.
My room mates Mischa and Igor got ready for this day, too.
At 6:40 our host mother Ms.Boakis gave us breakfast.
After eating cereals we went outside/abroad with our bags stuffed (filled) with lunchboxes and a camera.
Our group went to London by bus.
Mischa, Igor and me were waiting about one hour for the coach.
Finally, the coach arrived at 08:30 at the bus stop.
When we were in London, we splitted up in two groups and visited some sights.
One group went with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck.
I was in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupils had to make a presentation with their partners about the sightseeing.
The first students who showed their presentation with the topic "Houses of Parliament" were Lino and Antonia. The speech of Lino and Antonia was very long and I have quoted/noted down many information.

So ungefähr, sind vll. noch n paar Fehler drin, hab jetzt nicht die Lust es mir mehrmals durchzulesen.

schlaues bürschchen

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Vielen Dank

phoz · 28. Mai 2008

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Zitat von -Naruto-: ↑

On Wednesday the 21th Mai 2008 the teachers planned a trip to London. I got up at 6:00 o´clock and made me ready for row. First I brushed my teeth and took a shower. After me my room partners Mischa and Igor made themselves ready for that day. At 6:40 our host mother Ms.Boakis gave us breakfast. We all ate cereals and after the breakfast we went out wit our bags stuffed with lunchboxes and a camera. Mischa, Igor and I were waiting about one hout for the coach. Finally the coach arrived at 08:30 at the bus stop. Our group took the bus and we drove to London. When we arrived in London, we did our sightseeing in grous of 2. One group went with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck. I was in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupil in the group had to do a prasentation with their partners about their sight. The students, that started were Lino and Antonia with their topic "Houses of Parliament." The speech of Lino and Antonia was very long and so I noticed many informations.

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So sollte es in Ordnung sein, hab ncoh en paar unnütze Wörter weggemacht^^

010100111001 · 28. Mai 2008

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Habs noch mal ein wenig weiter überarbeitet...

On Wednesday, 21th of Mai 2008, the teachers planed an excursion to London.
I got up at 6:00 o´clock and I got ready for this day.
First I brushed my teeth and then I took a shower.
My room mates Mischa and Igor got ready for this day, too.
At 6:40 our host`s mother Ms.Boakis arranged breakfast.
After having cereals we left with our bags stuffed with lunchboxes and a camera.
Our group went to London by bus.
Mischa, Igor and me were waiting about one hour for the coach.
Finally, the coach arrived at 08:30 at the bus stop.
When we were in London, we splitted up in two groups and visited some sights.
One group went with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck.
I was in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupils had to make a presentationof the sightseeing tour with their partners .
The first students who conducted their presentation with the topic "Houses of Parliament" were Lino and Antonia. The speech of Lino and Antonia was very long and I gathered a lot of information.

neva!

Horstroad · 28. Mai 2008

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Zitat von Geazy: ↑

On Wednesday the 21th Mai 2008, the teachers had planned an trip to London.
I got up at 6:00 o´clock and (made me ready) for this day.
At first, I brushed my teeth and then I took a shower.
My room mates Mischa and Igor got ready for this day, too.
At 6:40 our host mother Ms.Boakis made us breakfast.
After eating cereals we went outside with our bags stuffed with lunchboxes and a camera.
Our group went to London by bus.
Mischa, Igor and me were waiting about one hour for the coach.
Finally, the coach arrived at 08:30 at the bus stop.
When we were in London, we splitted up in two groups and visited some sights.
One group went with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck.
I was in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupils had to make a presentation with their partners about the sightseeing.
The first students who showed their presentation (with) the topic "Houses of Parliament" were Lino and Antonia. The speech of Lino and Antonia was very long so I have noted down many information.

Klicke in dieses Feld, um es in vollständiger Größe anzuzeigen.

was ich verändert hab is fett, was weg soll is durchgestrichen und wo ich mir nich sicher bin is ne klammer drum, vergiss auf keinen fall das zweite 'n' bei planned, sonst heißt es eingeebnet oder abgehobelt...

mfg horst

DonGeilo · 30. Mai 2008

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21st of May

revolt · 30. Mai 2008

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welche klasse bist du?

bringt ja nichts, wenn ich das verbesser und es garnicht an dein alter / wissen angepasst ist..

3ndg3gn3r · 30. Mai 2008

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Es gibt kein Plural im englischen! Es bleibt information ohne s !

r0l!n9 · 2. Juni 2008

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Ich formuliere ihn dir noch ein wenig um. Dann klingts etwas besser. Ist aber eigentlich schon in Ordnung.

On Wednesday, 21st of Mai 2008, our teachers planed an excursion to London.
I got up at 6:00 o´clock to get ready for this day.
First I brushed my teeth and then took a shower.
After that it was my room mate's turn to get ready for this day.
At 6:40 Igor and Misha, my room mates were finished, and our host mom Ms.Boakis prepared breakfast.
After having cereals we left with our bags stuffed with lunchboxes and a camera.
Our group went to London by bus.
Mischa, Igor and I were waiting for about an hour at the bus stop.
Finally, the bus arrived at 08:30.
By the time we were in London, we splitted up in two groups and went sight seeing.
One group with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck.
I was in Mr. Balck´s group. The pupils had to make a presentation of the sightseeing tour with a partner.
The first students who conducted their presentation with the topic "Houses of Parliament" were Lino and Antonia. Their speech was very long and I gathered a lot of information.

Hoffe das hilft noch ein bisschen. Die anderen waren aber auch schon gut.

sve93 · 2. Juni 2008

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Na klar gibts Plural im englischen, aber der Plural von "information" ist halt gleich wie der Singular.

zNk · 2. Juni 2008

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Ich denke mal, so hat er es auch gemeint , nur etwas unvorteilhaft ausgedrückt^^. Ist doch klar dass es nicht two house sondern two houses is oder so^^, einfach unvorteilhafte formulierung.

unleashed · 2. Juni 2008

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@rolino

was soll bitteschön planed heissen? geflugzeugt?
planned heisst das

statt After that: Thereafter - klingt besser

After having had cereals

waited statt were waiting

..., we split up

sightseeing zusammen

"One group with Mr. Niemeitz and the other with Mr. Balck." da fehlt wohl ein verb zb. went

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